A Lai for Bob

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A Lai for Bob 

adenoidal snarl
it’s about a girl

mostly

but sometimes, the world
and how it turns, or

maybe

it’s a frantic swirl
of images, words

let fly

with venom and spite
an angry prophet

raging

but he’s more than that:
clown, joker, poet,

snide sage

in a feathered hat
an imp at sunset

dancing.

 

( a few notes on the form – each verse in a lai has nine lines arranged in groups of three; each group contains a couplet of 5 syllable lines and a single 2 syllable line; the rhyming pattern is aab aab aab; each verse can have different end rhymes but the pattern must be the same, for example…ccd ccd etc. I have been a bit loose with what constitutes a rhyme , so this poem is sort of lai-based, but I have tried to maintain consistency in terms of vowels and/or consonants.
For more detailed discussion on the form, check out here )

Participating in Open Link Night over at dVerse.

17 thoughts on “A Lai for Bob

  1. Glenn Buttkus

    Good old Bob–Dylan perhaps. I like the footloose rhyme schemes, it gives vitality to the piece. The last tercet is killer.

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  2. Steve Simpson

    Ditto, Jim, an enjoyable multifaceted cameo. I tried to read the explanatory lai notes, but my head exploded. Nevertheless an impressive achievement. Mmm, apparently I don’t need my head to type. I’m not sure whether that is good or bad.

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    1. sdtp33 Post author

      Ha, thanks Steve, I was thinking of writing a book called “Poetry for Masochists” – a cranium busting compendium of cruel and unusual verse forms.

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