A Ghazal about Everlasting Love (and a rabbit)
like that rabbit on TV
our love will last
you know, the pink one with the drum
(our love will last)
and the dark sunglasses
(our love will last)
who sometimes hits a wall
(our love will last)
and sometimes stalls
(our love will last)
but he keeps banging that drum
(our love will last)
the rabbit keeps banging the drum
(our love will last)
but unlike our love
alkaline batteries are not everlasting
and eventually the rabbit falls
breathes his last
and we need another simile
one that lasts
like plastic in a landfill
our love will last
like craters on the moon
our love will last
like the power of the sun
our love will last
like the winds out on the ocean
our love will last.
In my previous ghazal , “Bucket List” I vowed to write a ghazal about everlasting love for the dVerse ghazal challenge. So there you have it, my first love poem, a big challenge – I’m the kind of person whose usual response to the words “I love you” is “right back at ya”.
Stopdraggingthepanda 
Nothing says love like a rabbit!😁 I think you should write a ghazal with the refrain “right back at ya!” That’s your true voice, how you express love and (even though it might not fit the conventional words of love) I’m a firm believer is only letting one’s true voice be heard in poetry.
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Ah but sometimes it’s fun to try different voices!😊
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True! Maybe it’s because I just enjoy your “true voice” poems…😁
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Love rabbits and your poem shows a lot of love. I like the way you remove the brackets and when you alter the words of the refrain slightly. I think finding your voice when having a go at these poetry forms can be hard. Yes, you could try a very contemporary one and throw it right back at us!
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Thanks for the comments, much appreciated!
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This made me smile just as Bucket List did! I think you have a real knack for humorous poetry. Ogden Nash became famous for his. You’re well on your way. Please write more! I loved it.
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Thank you very much Gay, for your comments and the above all, the encouragement!
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It’s an absolute delight!
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Thank you, Rosemary, much appreciated!
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I like the way this one starts in flighty expectations, Jim, and returns to Eveready reality and renewables. We have to accept the temporary nature of everything, I suppose, and it’s no use complaining that nothing is made like it used to be. Long ago, my uncle used to repair toasters: the ones you now buy here for $10 or so and throw away when they get a bit burnt looking.
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Thanks Steve…yes it’s hard to find a toaster repair man these days!
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