A Ghazal about Everlasting Love (and a rabbit)

Frog and cat

 

A Ghazal about Everlasting Love (and a rabbit)

like that rabbit on TV
our love will last

you know, the pink one with the drum
(our love will last)

and the dark sunglasses
(our love will last)

who sometimes hits a wall
(our love will last)

and sometimes stalls
(our love will last)

but he keeps banging that drum
(our love will last)

the rabbit keeps banging the drum
(our love will last)

but unlike our love
alkaline batteries are not everlasting

and eventually the rabbit falls
breathes his last

and we need another simile
one that lasts

like plastic in a landfill
our love will last

like craters on the moon
our love will last

like the power of the sun
our love will last

like the winds out on the ocean
our love will last.

 

In my previous ghazal , “Bucket List” I vowed to write a ghazal about everlasting love for the dVerse ghazal challenge. So there you have it, my first love poem, a big challenge – I’m the kind of person whose usual response to the words “I love you” is “right back at ya”.

12 thoughts on “A Ghazal about Everlasting Love (and a rabbit)

  1. iidorun

    Nothing says love like a rabbit!😁 I think you should write a ghazal with the refrain “right back at ya!” That’s your true voice, how you express love and (even though it might not fit the conventional words of love) I’m a firm believer is only letting one’s true voice be heard in poetry.

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  2. navasolanature

    Love rabbits and your poem shows a lot of love. I like the way you remove the brackets and when you alter the words of the refrain slightly. I think finding your voice when having a go at these poetry forms can be hard. Yes, you could try a very contemporary one and throw it right back at us!

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  3. Pingback: A Ghazal about Everlasting Love (and a rabbit) | Luke 23:43 Jesus answered him, “Truly I tell you, today you will be with me in paradise.”

  4. Steve Simpson

    I like the way this one starts in flighty expectations, Jim, and returns to Eveready reality and renewables. We have to accept the temporary nature of everything, I suppose, and it’s no use complaining that nothing is made like it used to be. Long ago, my uncle used to repair toasters: the ones you now buy here for $10 or so and throw away when they get a bit burnt looking.

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