Bucket List (a ghazal)
mountain climbing in County Meath
put it on my bucket list
fly fishing in the Sahara
put it on my bucket list
snow shoeing in the Serengeti
put it on my bucket list
surfing in Saskatchewan
put it on my bucket list
stop hiding behind a shield of sarcasm
Really? Put that on my bucket list?
write a ghazal about everlasting love
aw fuck it, put it on my bucket list
stop peppering my poems with profanity
that’s a prohibition, it has no place on the list
It’s ghazal time again over at dverse, so here’s another attempt. By the way, in a classical ghazal (which this is not!), it is customary to insert one’s name in the final couplet.
Sorry about the language, I’ll do anything for a rhyme!
I love your sense of humor and game!!!! Sure, check off that from your bucket list (looking forward to reading it, really). Thanks for participating in our poetry form challenge.
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Thank you Grace, much appreciated!
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Great fun, loved it. (And I don’t think poets need apologise for excellent, poetic use of language – any language.)
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Thanks Rosemary! Much appreciated!
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For whatever it’s worth, I hate the whole concept of bucket lists. I’ve been looking for a place where it seems right to say that.
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Yep….the whole bucket list thing is a bit too self limiting! 😊
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You could just chuckitinthephucketbucket!! But I love your bucket list because it is full of oxymorons and stuff.
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You had the most liberating idea; I wish I’d been more rebellious with mine.
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Thanks Anna, I find with this form, once you find the right refrain, it gets easier!
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“I heard someone somewhere,” she said, sounding like Trump, “call the bucket list the fuck it list.” You rolled that into this tasty ghazal which was very satisfying.
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Thanks Suzanne!
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These words are honest and brought a smile. Great work.
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Thank you Astrid!
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Indeed rebellious. Smiles. I like the impossibility of achieving the goals on the bucket list, thereby fucking the list yourself while you warn the reader (us) not to! Ironic? Sarcastic? the very theme denies the original intent of the ghazal, that of divine or mortal love – whether you meant to fuck with it or not I don’t know but it works for me.
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Glad you liked it, Petru…..and you are right, for me the fun lies in taking a form and fucking with it!
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Smiles.
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Write On! I liked it. It works. It’s poetry!!!
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Thanks Gay!
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Anything with the word fuck has to be about love, right? 😉 this was terrific fun!
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Yes indeed! Thank you!
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