A Crisis of Confidence (tanka)

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A Crisis of Confidence

and Slim’s self esteem
condensed, fogged the window pane
trickled to the sill

and dried to a light brown stain
in the shape of Sicily.

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14 thoughts on “A Crisis of Confidence (tanka)”

sarahsouthwest October 18, 2019 at 12:26 am

I really like this. It’s such a small event, but your word choices are so good.

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:16 am
  
  Thanks Sarah!
  
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Frank Hubeny October 18, 2019 at 7:55 am

Nice description of lost self esteem as fog trickling on a window pane.

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:17 am
  
  Thanks Frank!
  
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petrujviljoen October 18, 2019 at 11:44 am

Fantastic! One watched as it seeped out of him.

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:17 am
  
  Thanks Petru, much appreciated!
  
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Laura Bloomsbury October 19, 2019 at 12:29 am

Well condensed and crafted – with a surprise at the end. I like your style very much.

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:18 am
  
  Thanks Laura!
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) October 19, 2019 at 12:41 pm

what wonder… that end is wonderful (even if it might be a Rorschach test)

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:18 am
  
  Thanks Bjorn!
  
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Christine Irving October 20, 2019 at 7:24 pm

LOL Wonderful!

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:20 am
  
  Thanks Christine!
  
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Nitin October 20, 2019 at 9:49 pm

There’s dark humour here, but you’ve described a loss of morale very well.

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1. sdtp33 Post authorOctober 21, 2019 at 11:20 am
  
  thank you!
  
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