End of Summer double septo
like a wasp in late August
circling a bin of regrets.
This poem is a double septo also known as a quatorze, it consists of two seven syllable lines. Sometimes, I find that the five syllable lines in a haiku create a flatness, a po-faced solemnity…wasp in late August…too much oracle not enough bounce. A seven syllable line allows room for rhythm.
Obviously, I made up the double septo bit. Recently I wrote a quadrille as part of a dVerse prompt and it got me thinking about arbitrary verse forms. A quadrille is a poem of exactly 44 words, it doesn’t get more arbitrary than that.
I like your invention!
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Thank you!
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For me, that would have to be a large bin. Perhaps wasps regret being wasps. Enjoyed the words and the photo, Jim. I agree about Haikus/ I like your rhythm, I am keen on rhythm, especially samba. I haven’t read up on any of this, but I wonder whether the Japanese origin of Haiku, and the lack of stresses on syllables in Japanese as compared to English and other languages, is relevant.
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Thanks Steve for your insightful comments on the haiku, the Japanese language and the emotional life of wasps. Samba on, samba on!
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My pleasure, Jim. I now realise there is a connection. One of my fave Braz songs is Circo Marimbondo = “Wasp Circus.” I can confidently say this means nothing.
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